I know it's blurry, but if you click on it, it will open and will be easier to read. Also, the rhythm is kind of off, so if you have suggestions, make sure to tell me.
Jennifer, I really like how you made it into a picture, it kind of gives it a different feeling than before. Maybe at the end you might want to be a little more subtle, don't try to give the reader to much of your own opinion. I personally don't think that the rhythm matters since it's an open form, but if you wanted it to rhyme, then you would need to fix the rhythm. -Karen
This poem is really good and it really flows with all of the repetition with the friends will do this and friends will do that parts. I don't see anything that needs to be changed.
Hey this is Allison and I'm in the 7th grade class. This was a really great poem and it was cool how you put it into a picture. Friends are a great way to write a poem and you utilized it very well.
This was really well done. Each stanza addresses a different issue in a subtle manner. I do agree with the idea of going either closed or open; when there is too close of a mix between the two, it just feels off.
Jennifer, What an insightful poem. Friends are so very important throughout your entire life. It is interesting to me how my view of friends have changed through time and different experiences. When I was in middle school I am not sure that I had the quality of friends you have at this time. You are very lucky and they are very lucky to have YOU in their lives !
Jennifer,
ReplyDeleteI really like how you made it into a picture, it kind of gives it a different feeling than before. Maybe at the end you might want to be a little more subtle, don't try to give the reader to much of your own opinion. I personally don't think that the rhythm matters since it's an open form, but if you wanted it to rhyme, then you would need to fix the rhythm.
-Karen
I love this poem! The colors are very cool and happy. There is nothing you need to change! :)
ReplyDeleteBy the way the scribble clock is super cool:)
ReplyDeleteThis poem is really good and it really flows with all of the repetition with the friends will do this and friends will do that parts. I don't see anything that needs to be changed.
ReplyDeleteHey this is Allison and I'm in the 7th grade class. This was a really great poem and it was cool how you put it into a picture. Friends are a great way to write a poem and you utilized it very well.
ReplyDeleteThis was really well done. Each stanza addresses a different issue in a subtle manner. I do agree with the idea of going either closed or open; when there is too close of a mix between the two, it just feels off.
ReplyDeleteJennifer,
ReplyDeleteWhat an insightful poem. Friends are so very important throughout your entire life. It is interesting to me how my view of friends have changed through time and different experiences. When I was in middle school I am not sure that I had the quality of friends you have at this time. You are very lucky and they are very lucky to have YOU in their lives !